So this past week our whole class has been making stories. It is about the underwater and it’s not really a story, cause you have to write about stuff around and like try not to add you in it? If that makes sense? We had to make this burger planning, where there was the introduction, then 3 paragraphs, and finally the summary.
I have done 2 paragraphs so far I’ll show you
Paragraph – 1.
As I swam through all the bubbles a rainbow blur emerged, and then it unblurred into a wonderful, beautiful coral reef. All types of colours and shapes emerged, it was lively and amazing. Schools of colourful fish swam past, and clown fish swam in and out of the anemone, there were with fish with different patterns and they searched the sea floor. It was draped with seaweed and kelp. Suddenly a big blue thing went past, it was a baby whale, it was cute and had sea urchin all over it. Little fishes swam around it, plucking their little beaks at the tiny whale. The whale moved on with it’s little fishy friends and behind it was the end of the magical reef. And then it was a deep dark drop.
Paragraph – 2.
I floated down the massive, dark drop, I felt that this place was grim and gloomy, as I got closer I could see bits of dead coral everywhere and emerged from the darkness was a old wooden, broken ship. The sails were ripped and shredded, massive rocks came out of the ground and had pierced the heart of the ship. Everything was dark and dead, nothing of life lived here. I swam on and it lightened up. As I swam into the light I saw a whale imprisoned in a fishing net, it was caught and trapped and it was squirming around, spreading bubbles and sand everywhere, suddenly something came in the distant.
Did you like it, tell me if I should change anything?
